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2022-11-30
5:30
Ben yelled at teenagers at the theater
6:42
Discourteous teenagers! Well of course I was going to yell at them.
8:24
I don't have official notes.
Right. It doesn't sound like you have any notes.
Well, it's up here in my head. I know what I want to say.
Those aren't notes, those are thoughts.
Yeah, they're more of thoughts.
How to Fix the Movie
- Expand the timeline by moving the start of the movie 10 years earlier.
- Flesh out the characters.
- Third act is heist instead of a battle.
- Leia is not directly involved in the heist.
- One member of the team turns the others in to the Empire.
- The escape ship is damaged and can't rendezvous with the Rebellion. Donny Yen uses the Force, which guides their hyperspace jump to Tatooine.
- Dying act is to pass the plans to Leia. Darth Vader intercepts because the traitor put a tracker on the escape ship.
- The main characters are imprisoned on the Death Star. The movie ends where A New Hope ends, with the Death Star blowing up, but now the moment is bittersweet.
Closing
Donations are up to $3,800 for One Day's Wages. Ben still says they won't make the $5,000 goal.